假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教MsJenkins写...

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   假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教Ms Jenkins 写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。

注意：

     1. 词数100左右;

     2. 可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯。

【回答】

Dear Ms Jenkins,

I am Li Hua. I am writing to tell you something about my plan for the coming summer vacation and I also want you to do me a favor.

In order to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign capital company. I have already finished my job application and personal resume. But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume, so I don’t even know if there are something to pay attention to. So, I’m writing you the letter , hoping you can give me some help. I will be very grateful if you can help me.

Looking forward to your reply.  And I’d be really thankful.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

【亮点】 本文是一篇较为优秀的范文。格式正确，要点全面，语言通顺流畅，很好地完成了写作任务。在本文中开头提出写信的目的，然后具体讲述自己的困难，再提出请求，最后表达自己的感激之情。所以在内容上逻辑*较强。此外，作者还使用了不定式短语In order to get some practical experience, 现在分词短语hoping you can give me some help, 宾语从句if there are something to pay attention to等。经典句式this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume也是文章的亮点所在。

知识点：提纲作文

题型：书面表达